Post by account_disabled on Nov 30, 2023 5:41:33 GMT
Let's see it together. Wrong song I entrust this letter to a farmer in the hope that he will bring it to civilization. I watch him walk away until his figure vanishes into the forest. Little by little even the rhythmic trampling of his mule becomes remembered in these places of mystery. The character who writes, I must point out, speaks through letters. So do you see the error? How can he write to his recipient who sees the farmer walking away with his letter if he hasn't finished it yet? “I entrust” is right in my opinion, a colloquial present that replaces “I will entrust”. But the rest is incorrect. It's an impossible scene.
Corrected song I entrust this letter to a farmer in the hope that he will bring it to civilization. I will see him go away until his figure vanishes into the forest and the rhythmic trampling of his mule gradually Phone Number Data becomes a memory in these places of mystery. I don't know if during the revision I will leave this passage complete or I will cut everything that comes after the first point, which is useless, in my opinion. But the song is correct. Corrected passage and third-person narration He entrusts the letter to a farmer in the hope that he will take it to civilization. She watches him walk away until his figure vanishes into the forest. Little by little even the rhythmic trampling of his mule becomes remembered in those places of mystery.
In this case, however, I don't see any error: there is an external narrator who tells everything he sees. Even if the time is in the present, the actions described are still finished, concluded. The narrator does not have to die Unless, of course, we're writing a story about the supernatural. But it is absolutely not possible or credible that I write that I am dying. Or, better yet, in some cases the scene may have its own justification. Let's look at two extemporaneous cases. Letter from space The air in the capsule is running out. Writing is becoming torture, your vision is blurring and your strength is fading. I can't help but… A scene like this is valid, don't you think? The astronaut was abandoned in space and writes his diary.
Corrected song I entrust this letter to a farmer in the hope that he will bring it to civilization. I will see him go away until his figure vanishes into the forest and the rhythmic trampling of his mule gradually Phone Number Data becomes a memory in these places of mystery. I don't know if during the revision I will leave this passage complete or I will cut everything that comes after the first point, which is useless, in my opinion. But the song is correct. Corrected passage and third-person narration He entrusts the letter to a farmer in the hope that he will take it to civilization. She watches him walk away until his figure vanishes into the forest. Little by little even the rhythmic trampling of his mule becomes remembered in those places of mystery.
In this case, however, I don't see any error: there is an external narrator who tells everything he sees. Even if the time is in the present, the actions described are still finished, concluded. The narrator does not have to die Unless, of course, we're writing a story about the supernatural. But it is absolutely not possible or credible that I write that I am dying. Or, better yet, in some cases the scene may have its own justification. Let's look at two extemporaneous cases. Letter from space The air in the capsule is running out. Writing is becoming torture, your vision is blurring and your strength is fading. I can't help but… A scene like this is valid, don't you think? The astronaut was abandoned in space and writes his diary.